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Nancy1340 wrote:Feedback? How about just M-O-R-E?
I think it's a very good story and the Aunt in the wood, ..... I like her.
Not sure what she plans on doing after she opens the gas tank. Hope nothing to hurt herself.
It's kinda suspicious when at first she wanted what was in the jug then at the end she told Octavia to take it back with her. What did she mean she didn't need it, she had kin? I thought Octavia was kin. No?
223shootersc wrote:another good one, the people showing up and putting the kids in the van to draw sympathy was a good angle but it didn,t come off quite right, I couldn't tell if that was what you were going far or it was just kinda confusing writing
TacAir wrote:Nancy1340 wrote:
Daddy's tonic = pure hillfolk made 'shine!
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