Wilkes County (restarted 10/17)

by **AeroRat** » Fri Jan 13, 2012 2:54 am

Yeah. I'm slow. But we're working on that. I sort of got sidetracked doing a crit for a friend. Said crit has now exceeded the length of the actual work and still isn't finished, so...

Yeah. Brilliance on my part. :lol:

by **AeroRat** » Wed Jan 18, 2012 3:06 am

And...scratch Block II. Back to the drawing board.

by **URBAN ASSAULT** » Wed Jan 18, 2012 11:27 am

AAARRGGHHHHHH!

:cry:

Will there EVER be moar story?

:gonk:

-urban

by **AeroRat** » Wed Jan 18, 2012 4:19 pm

There will be. But I intend it should be readable first. :lol:

by **d1chet** » Wed Jan 18, 2012 4:22 pm

I got time to read any drafts you have

by **Catshooter** » Thu Jan 19, 2012 4:44 pm

Man AreoRat, you write very well! I've read all of this story now and am very impressed (and entertained, too). For me, your words very effortlessly painted pictures in my head of the actions happening in your story.

The only thing I would change is to have you identify your characters by name more often. Don't open a chapter with "He" or "She". Using their names help keep my attention oriented to where we've moved to now (with the new chapter).

As always, MOAR would be much appreciated.

Cat

by **Mission_Survivor** » Thu Jan 19, 2012 7:03 pm

Glad you are reviewing and re-editing your work before you submit them. But break us off a bit... Maybe share with us the problems you are encountering, some one else might be able to help you with plot holes or story development...

I will admit, I am a slow reader... and I forget things pretty fast... Please dont make me re-read this story...

by **Bearcat** » Thu Jan 19, 2012 7:06 pm

Aerorat, just out of curiosity, in your first story, what was the burned hanging corpses at the bridge gonna unfold to?

by **AeroRat** » Fri Jan 20, 2012 1:55 am

Catshooter wrote:Man AreoRat, you write very well! I've read all of this story now and am very impressed (and entertained, too). For me, your words very effortlessly painted pictures in my head of the actions happening in your story.

The only thing I would change is to have you identify your characters by name more often. Don't open a chapter with "He" or "She". Using their names help keep my attention oriented to where we've moved to now (with the new chapter).

As always, MOAR would be much appreciated.

Cat

Muchos groceries. I'll be addressing that in Block II and probably again in the rewrite. So far it happens a lot because (generally) there's just the one named character at the center. As I start throwing them together and picking up extra POV chars I'm having to addressing them by proper names.

Mission_Survivor wrote:Glad you are reviewing and re-editing your work before you submit them. But break us off a bit... Maybe share with us the problems you are encountering, some one else might be able to help you with plot holes or story development...

I will admit, I am a slow reader... and I forget things pretty fast... Please dont make me re-read this story...

I'm typing as fast as I can think. Err...uh... I'll type faster. :lol:

Problem-wise it was mostly an issue of structure; I'd written myself into a corner from which there was no graceful escape, and no matter how much I twisted and torqued that sucker it wasn't going to fall in line. Since the restart things are going much smoother, though - I'm going to tentatively say I hope to have this next block up and ready in two to three weeks.

Though if you do opt to re-read it, feel free to point out mistakes. There's usually a couple that get by me.

Bearcat wrote:Aerorat, just out of curiosity, in your first story, what was the burned hanging corpses at the bridge
gonna unfold to?

That...will actually be returning. I hope you'll understand if I'm loathe to explain it in any detail, but it's both better and worse than you think.

***

Thanks for sticking with me, everybody. I know I'm slower than hell, but it's good to know that people are still enjoying the hard-fought results. Hopefully it'll be worth the delay. 8-)

And for those so interested...Ranger* says hey.

*Not my dog. Alas.

by **URBAN ASSAULT** » Fri Jan 20, 2012 12:39 pm

That dog has Omega man/devil eyes... just sayin'.

:shock:

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by **AeroRat** » Fri Jan 20, 2012 5:08 pm

If you stare at it long enough it starts talking to you. :shock:

by **Bearcat** » Fri Jan 20, 2012 5:34 pm

ok fine. i'll wait.

by **URBAN ASSAULT** » Sat Jan 21, 2012 12:12 am

AeroRat wrote:If you stare at it long enough it starts talking to you.

-urban

by **dantheremaining** » Mon Jan 23, 2012 2:12 pm

Aerorat, I saw new posts on Wilkes County and got really excited.

Why would you trick me like that?

by **AeroRat** » Mon Jan 23, 2012 6:40 pm

Ask the dog. He'll explain everything. :twisted:

by **Mission_Survivor** » Wed Feb 01, 2012 7:10 am

is he like the Busch Beans dog? How much to bribe him....

.... strangely enough (maybe due to sleep deprivation or the meds for this flu I'm fighting) but i think the dog did talk to me...

by **Ike** » Fri Apr 06, 2012 6:29 pm

Moar?

by **Laager** » Fri Apr 06, 2012 7:33 pm

Darn it.......I feel cheated........ :lol:

........................MOAR?

by **Ike** » Fri Apr 06, 2012 8:20 pm

Haha sorry,

by **dantheremaining** » Sat Apr 07, 2012 5:44 pm

Every time I see this one move to the top of the queue, I get all excited, only to realize a couple of mouse-clicks later, that it was only us poor, deprived MOAR-zombies begging, once again.

Please, AeroRat...my emotions can't handle this for much longer...