DannusMaximus wrote:Thanks for the replies, folks. I'm seeing the view count tick up, but not hearing much back. I'm a complete sucker for feedback - - let me know what you think of the story! Are the animal conversations too silly? I know they can't talk, but I'm convinced (as a long-time dog owner) that SOME type of communications happens between our furry friends, so I'm trying to show that. I'm really attempting to see a ZPAW from a dog's perspective and it's a bit of a mind-bender for me, to say the least. Buddy has to make up for his lack of ability for complex reasoning with his hypersensitive nose and ears and other instincts. It's a challenge to write, but pretty damn fun also.
Buddy's got a ways to go. If I've got some folks interested in his further journey's, I'll keep banging away on the keyboard!
Folks generally won't post (or send) any feedback unless you step on a toe/hit a button.
Otherwise, you see your hit count climb and know at least someone is reading the story.
I've written about dogs in two differetn ways - third person personal or one of the humans 'reflecting; the gdog.
"Morning found him covered with snow and dogs, all of them warm and toasty. He was so stiff, he decided to wait until the sun was well up and giving some heat. He finally managed to drag his bones out of bed. What the dogs made of this, they kept to themselves. "Dogs are really smart that way," he thought to himself, "if only I had been that smart."
It hurt but he soon had everything packed and the small Trangia stove burning, turning alcohol into hot water for a breakfast. Buddy and the girls seemed content to lie on their blankets and watch him eat. "Sorry kiddos this freeze dried crap would kill you. Soon as I am done, I have some nice dried salmon for you. Yes I do! Alaskan-made special, just for you." An observer would have sworn the dogs spoke English, for at the mention of the salmon treat; their tails started wagging together, as if they knew what he had promised."
""Have a seat Al, this will take a few minutes," As they sat, they saw a black streak come from behind the log building, then head for them like a fur covered guided missile! "Just remember Al, sit tight and don't move." She stood and walked a few paces away.
Seconds later the huge dog skidded to a stop just inches from Al's face. The dog was breathing hard, but had yet to utter a single noise. It took everything he owned not to stand and flee in the face of this - monster. Its head was massive, full of sharp teeth and Al would swear later, in looking into the animals eyes he could see something in there that was frightening at a level far below conscious thought. This dog was Death incarnate.
"Buddy. BUDDY!" Nora had to call twice. The dog moved his head just enough to look at her. "Buddy. Hup!" The dog reluctantly went to Nora, walked around her, then sat - keeping Nora behind his massive frame. She knelt down and rubbed his head. "Good Buddy. Good".
Holding his collar, she walked back to Al. Sitting next to Al, she touched his arm. "Stay still Al. I'll let you know when to stand, OK?" He gave her hand a slight squeeze. "Buddy. Mine!' She put her arm around Al. She leaned over and licked his ear, then blew in it. A light laugh spilled out. "Buddy. Friend!" "OK Al. hold out your hand, palm facing you. Let him sniff it or whatever else he wants - OK?"
It took Buddy at least ten minutes to be satisfied with his examination. He walked off just a bit and laid down, still looking at Al with appeared to be suspicion. Not good, that."
"Walking to one side of the party, then the other, Buddy would lick Al's hand from time to time, just to let Al know that he was on the job. Buddy could tell, just as dogs always do in some way unknown to mankind, that everything would be fine."
So, ya, keep going. Tell a story, foks will read it, tell a good story and they will buy into it (more feedback/PMs) and who knows, tell a long enough & good enough story, make it a book and have a go at seling it....
So far, do good. And yes, dogs DO talk, you just have to pay attetion is all....