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Re: High Ground

Post by Sheriff McClelland » Mon Aug 06, 2012 9:39 pm

Excellent , I'm in ! :D
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Re: High Ground

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Post by wee drop o' bush » Tue Aug 07, 2012 3:14 am

Could you make each instalment a leetle longer?
Or are you keeping us hanging on in purpose :twisted: :rofl:
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Re: High Ground: House of Adair

Post by FlashDaddy » Tue Aug 07, 2012 6:11 am

Nice post dogbane! That was a gutsy move on Cindy's part, but he was theatening her water supply.
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Re: High Ground: House of Adair

Post by mr_slappy75 » Tue Aug 07, 2012 7:50 am

wee drop o' bush wrote:Could you make each instalment a leetle longer?
Or are you keeping us hanging on in purpose :twisted: :rofl:
Far be it from us to rush an author in the creative process; I mean, what with it being your world and us having the privilege of being allowed along for the ride. If you are not happy with something, don’t force it out because of us pestering you.

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Re: High Ground: House of Adair

Post by dogbane » Tue Aug 07, 2012 8:00 am

I get the opportunity to write about three pages per day, and I post them as I have them. They already seem rushed to me, but writing is rewriting.

Yeah, Cindy made a gutsy move. Was it believable? I've been working up to the meeting, and it could have gone many different ways. Maybe I keep taking the safe route. :?:
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Re: High Ground: House of Adair

Post by TacAir » Tue Aug 07, 2012 10:44 am

dogbane wrote:I get the opportunity to write about three pages per day, and I post them as I have them. They already seem rushed to me, but writing is rewriting.

Yeah, Cindy made a gutsy move. Was it believable? I've been working up to the meeting, and it could have gone many different ways. Maybe I keep taking the safe route. :?:
Believable in as much as she had to do something to protect 'her' water.

Cat soup - heh, good one.

If I may make a suggestion, one likely to get me lynched - if you can only write 3 pages a day - do that. Then go back over it until you're satisfied. Gather several days work together, then post a longer segment. Or not.

As far as the Amazon route - it costs nothing to publish, just a bit of effort. And good cover art. I've seen 'books' as short as 40 pages that sell well @0.99 USD per book - several folks publish 'books' that might better be considered as chapters (10K words or less) as a continuing story and enjoy some success.

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Re: High Ground: House of Adair

Post by dogbane » Tue Aug 07, 2012 10:49 am

Thanks for the feedback. I may wait until I have the next full chapter written before posting.
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Re: High Ground: House of Adair

Post by Bearcat » Tue Aug 07, 2012 5:57 pm

Well that's just great. Another story I'm tied to now. You better not leave it hanging like 90% of the authors around here do. I can't take another heart breaking loss of moar.
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Re: High Ground: House of Adair

Post by dogbane » Tue Aug 07, 2012 6:36 pm

Bearcat wrote:Well that's just great. Another story I'm tied to now. You better not leave it hanging like 90% of the authors around here do. I can't take another heart breaking loss of moar.
I promise to finish this story in around 200 typed pages (unless I die or become mentally incompetent) by sometime in September.
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Re: High Ground: House of Adair

Post by TacAir » Tue Aug 07, 2012 8:59 pm

dogbane wrote:
Bearcat wrote:Well that's just great. Another story I'm tied to now. You better not leave it hanging like 90% of the authors around here do. I can't take another heart breaking loss of moar.
I promise to finish this story in around 200 typed pages (unless I die or become mentally incompetent) by sometime in September.
What??? You have a life???!!!

LOL, looking forward to the next installment.
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Re: High Ground: House of Adair

Post by dogbane » Tue Aug 07, 2012 11:33 pm

I'm embarrassed at how badly written some parts are. Remember, this is a first draft y'all are reading. The next installment will be a long one. Probably tomorrow night.

Does anyone think Rob will make it back from Uncle Dave's? Will there be visitors along anytime? How secure is the perimeter, really? What are James' priorities now that he is where he thinks he is meant to be?
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Re: High Ground: House of Adair

Post by DAVE KI » Wed Aug 08, 2012 12:32 am

dogbane wrote:I'm embarrassed at how badly written some parts are. Remember, this is a first draft y'all are reading. The next installment will be a long one. Probably tomorrow night.

Does anyone think Rob will make it back from Uncle Dave's? Will there be visitors along anytime? How secure is the perimeter, really? What are James' priorities now that he is where he thinks he is meant to be?
It's a good story but me thinks we must be in a different time here.Way different.
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Post by wee drop o' bush » Wed Aug 08, 2012 6:18 am

I think Rob will but he'll be infected & dying so his wife will have to kill him.
She could be potentially even tougher than the dude.
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Re: High Ground: House of Adair

Post by Sheriff McClelland » Wed Aug 08, 2012 8:05 am

I think wdo'b has it nailed about Rob coming back infected if he does return .

I'm curious to what Jimmy finds in the secret rooms he has yet to discover .

The way the family hides at night makes me wonder if there are infected still inside the wire .

I thought it was strange that after being clean/sober for all that time that Jimmy dove right in to the juice . High stress I assume .
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Re: High Ground: House of Adair

Post by dogbane » Wed Aug 08, 2012 8:48 am

Sheriff McClelland wrote:I think wdo'b has it nailed about Rob coming back infected if he does return .

I'm curious to what Jimmy finds in the secret rooms he has yet to discover .

The way the family hides at night makes me wonder if there are infected still inside the wire .

I thought it was strange that after being clean/sober for all that time that Jimmy dove right in to the juice . High stress I assume .
The secret rooms will be interesting to write. It won't be a Bat Cave or secret room full of AK-47s, though. He might find something interesting, however. Note that he found bootleg Prohibition-era Canadian spirits in the cellar. Pop-Pop might have been into more than textiles.

Cindy doesn't trust the fence. The implication is, of course, that they have been through some scary moments that left a stamp on her mind. One reason they eat so poorly now is because she won't venture far in search of food out of fear.Of course, there may be food right under her nose that she doesn't recognize as food. Rob didn't leave them very well prepared. He is essentially doing an "I'm bugging out to your place!" to Uncle Dave. I don't have a lot of faith in Rob at this time, but he might surprise me.

As for James diving into the juice, he might have thought it was a proper reward for his efforts, a way of celebrating his return. In some way, he felt entitled.
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Re: High Ground: House of Adair

Post by dogbane » Wed Aug 08, 2012 8:53 am

BTW, when I cast this movie in my mind, I see Robert Downey, Jr. as James Adair, Casey Affleck as Rob McReady, and a young Holly Hunter as Cindy McReady. But I haven't described any of them physically in detail, so you can picture them however you want.
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Oh lord no! I think R.D Jnr is like a Toad :gonk:
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Re: High Ground: House of Adair

Post by dogbane » Wed Aug 08, 2012 8:59 am

wee drop o' bush wrote:Oh lord no! I think R.D Jnr is like a Toad :gonk:
He's an oddball, but he has the intensity, eccentricity and physicality I imagine for the character. Picture someone else if you want. Christian Bale comes to mind. Or Billy Crudup.
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Re: High Ground: House of Adair

Post by Sheriff McClelland » Wed Aug 08, 2012 9:22 am

The secret rooms will be interesting to write. It won't be a Bat Cave or secret room full of AK-47s, though.
Exactly . i was thinking more like some 1920's period Winchester 94 30-30 , Win 97 12ga pump or a high grade Westley Richards or Purdey British 12ga double . Maybe some old Colt or S&W handguns 8-)
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Post by wee drop o' bush » Wed Aug 08, 2012 10:48 am

I don't have a mental picture of any actor for the characters yet. I like when movies have an unknown for key roles.
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Re: High Ground: House of Adair

Post by SByrd89 » Wed Aug 08, 2012 8:00 pm

This story is great, I cant wait to read the next installment and see what the future holds gor James Cindy and Rob.

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Re: High Ground: House of Adair

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High Ground: House of Adair

Post by Ike » Wed Aug 08, 2012 8:53 pm

Moar please, been waiting all night for the update.

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