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Wilkes County

Post by AeroRat » Sun Dec 05, 2010 5:14 am

Welcome, one and all. To those of you returning to Wilkes County and the adventures therein, welcome back.

If you're looking for the story, it begins on page two. If you're looking for comments on the last attempt (now without the benefit of context) keep reading and you'll run into it sooner or later.

There will be ten installments in the first block. With any luck the tenth will be up on or around Halloween. As ever, your comments, criticisms and pointy sticks are welcome. I like to think I've gotten it fairly well straight by now; should you find a plot hole or something that strikes you odd, however, by all means point it out. I may not explain it but I can probably fix it....probably.

So - to the story!

For those of you opting out of the scenic route, direct link:
http://zombiehunters.org/forum/viewtopi ... 0#p1891760
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Re: Wilkes County: Outbreak

Post by Bearcat » Sun Dec 05, 2010 10:41 am

Sorry to be a negative nancy, but so far, I don't like it as much as your first version. So far, all you've done is write a "this job sucks" rant. I want zombies!!!!!!!!!! Not that I don't mind slow intros, those can be very good. I just don't see where this is going and why I should care. Again, don't wanna be a dick, just my opinions, which are like assholes; everyone's got one and they're both full of the same thing. I will keep reading though, I thoroughly enjoyed your first one.

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Re: Wilkes County: Outbreak

Post by d1chet » Sun Dec 05, 2010 12:21 pm

Bearcat wrote:So far, all you've done is write a "this job sucks" rant.
This is my only complaint also, but at the same time I'm enjoying the extra level of depth and detail you've added to the story.

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Re: Wilkes County: Outbreak

Post by AeroRat » Sun Dec 05, 2010 3:46 pm

Truth be told, I sort of expected that. So I don't take it personal or anything. 8)

Not sure what to say, though. This one's going to run a little slower than the last one. On the good side, there will be zombies. On the bad (from an action standpoint) they won't be along for a while. It's more of a gradual buildup. Sort of an experiment, which means it'll likely as not blow up in my face. Thing is, one of the aspects of the first that bothered me was things just sort of happened (primarily because I did a shit job of planning...go figure). Just came out of nowhere. No lead-in, no foreshadowing, not a whole lot of background - meaning that you had a faster pace at the expense of characterization.

Admittedly trying for a character-driven story in a plot driven genre is a risk but by and large my character projects have gone better than my plot ones. I'm gambling on a similar result here, though we'll have to wait and see.

If nothing else it'll give people here something to rip into when they get done chewing over the Walking Dead finale tonight. :lol:

Appreciate you guys reading. I hope to see you back here again.

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Re: Wilkes County: Outbreak

Post by Bearcat » Sun Dec 05, 2010 4:55 pm

Like I said, there's nothing wrong with a slow build, ponyboy does a great job of that and I will follow the story.

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Re: Wilkes County: Outbreak

Post by ZMace » Mon Dec 06, 2010 11:31 am

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Re: Wilkes County: Outbreak

Post by d1chet » Mon Dec 06, 2010 11:41 am

AeroRat wrote:Truth be told, I sort of expected that. So I don't take it personal or anything. 8)

Not sure what to say, though. This one's going to run a little slower than the last one. On the good side, there will be zombies. On the bad (from an action standpoint) they won't be along for a while. It's more of a gradual buildup.
As long as you didn't stray too far from the original story's telling of the outbreak first happening I'll be patient through the buildup haha.

I was so creeped out the way I envisioned your breakout first happening in the first one.

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Re: Wilkes County: Outbreak

Post by AeroRat » Mon Dec 06, 2010 11:44 am

As long as you didn't stray too far from the original story's telling of the outbreak first happening I'll be patient through the buildup haha.

I was so creeped out the way I envisioned your breakout first happening in the first one.
Anything in particular?

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Re: Wilkes County: Outbreak

Post by d1chet » Mon Dec 06, 2010 11:54 am

AeroRat wrote:
As long as you didn't stray too far from the original story's telling of the outbreak first happening I'll be patient through the buildup haha.

I was so creeped out the way I envisioned your breakout first happening in the first one.
Anything in particular?
Everything from when he first saw what he thought was a meth head wandering around the fuel farm at night, (airports at night can be creepy, especially the ones in the middle of no where) to his drive home after, and being stuck in that school.

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Re: Wilkes County: Outbreak

Post by AeroRat » Mon Dec 06, 2010 4:23 pm

The meth head will still be around, in some form, as will the drive home. The school part got redpenned in the rewrite, though, for two reason - primarily because the new outbreak's going to happen pretty quick once it hits, and second because our intrepid hero (and heroine, in the next bit) are bright enough not to fall for that one.

I guess they got a little sharper in the interim. I'm hoping I didn't get dumber. :lol:

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Re: Wilkes County: Outbreak

Post by Mr. E. Monkey » Tue Dec 07, 2010 12:30 pm

AeroRat wrote:The meth head will still be around, in some form, as will the drive home. The school part got redpenned in the rewrite, though, for two reason - primarily because the new outbreak's going to happen pretty quick once it hits, and second because our intrepid hero (and heroine, in the next bit) are bright enough not to fall for that one.

I guess they got a little sharper in the interim. I'm hoping I didn't get dumber. :lol:
While that does make me happy for our intrepid survivors, it makes me a little sad, because it was a very interesting section of the story. Watching horror movies, I'm sure you've been tempted to yell and curse at the tv, "no, don't go upstairs, you idiot! Don't split up! What is wrong with you people!" As much as it drives us crazy, it gets us involved.

The school was kinda like that, except better. Reading it, we knew it was a bad idea, but the escape from the school was a good read.

Regardless, it's your story, it's a good story, and I'm sure that your revision will be even better.

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Re: Wilkes County: Outbreak

Post by AeroRat » Tue Dec 07, 2010 5:36 pm

Then again...some of that bad judgment may find its way back in. One never knows.

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Re: Wilkes County: Outbreak

Post by Bearcat » Tue Dec 07, 2010 7:17 pm

Ok, now I expected an update when I saw you posted, so get to it!

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Re: Wilkes County: Outbreak

Post by Mr. E. Monkey » Tue Dec 07, 2010 8:52 pm

AeroRat wrote:Then again...some of that bad judgment may find its way back in. One never knows.
But hopefully one will find out very soon... :twisted:
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Re: Wilkes County: Outbreak

Post by GotMak » Wed Dec 08, 2010 12:51 pm

I like the character-driven version, makes it more interesting and suspenseful, for me.
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Re: Wilkes County: Outbreak

Post by AeroRat » Fri Dec 10, 2010 5:48 pm

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Re: Wilkes County: Outbreak

Post by ForgeCorvus » Fri Dec 10, 2010 9:24 pm

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Re: Wilkes County: Outbreak

Post by Bearcat » Fri Dec 10, 2010 10:39 pm

Ok, at least this one had zombies in it somewhat, I'll give you that :wink:

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Re: Wilkes County: Outbreak

Post by Trident » Sun Dec 12, 2010 7:44 pm

Waiting on the next chapter. Thanks

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Re: Wilkes County: Outbreak

Post by URBAN ASSAULT » Sun Dec 12, 2010 8:44 pm

Tagged for future chewy, readable goodness to come.

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Re: Wilkes County: Outbreak

Post by kremor » Thu Dec 23, 2010 10:57 pm

mmmm, what happened?

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Re: Wilkes County: Outbreak

Post by URBAN ASSAULT » Fri Dec 24, 2010 8:12 am

He deleted the entire story with no explanation.

Fuck this guy and his attitude.

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Re: Wilkes County: Outbreak

Post by Cascade Failure » Fri Dec 24, 2010 12:11 pm

URBAN ASSAULT wrote:He deleted the entire story with no explanation.

Fuck this guy and his attitude.

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Re: Wilkes County: Outbreak

Post by Bearcat » Fri Dec 24, 2010 6:30 pm

Cascade Failure wrote:
URBAN ASSAULT wrote:He deleted the entire story with no explanation.

Fuck this guy and his attitude.

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Before I agree with you I would like to know what happened.
Me too, but I won't cry about it if he doesn't. Plenty of other good stories to follow.

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