Looking Forward, Looking Back.

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Re: Looking Forward, Looking Back.

Post by Bearcat » Wed Apr 27, 2011 7:47 am

Damn. Moar is over. Seems like it ended abruptly. Did you run out of ideas or don't have enough time to dedicate to the story? I'm not jumping on you or anything, it's just a bummer to see it end so quickly.
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Re: Looking Forward, Looking Back.

Post by 12_Gauge_Chimp » Wed Apr 27, 2011 4:28 pm

Bearcat wrote:Damn. Moar is over. Seems like it ended abruptly. Did you run out of ideas or don't have enough time to dedicate to the story? I'm not jumping on you or anything, it's just a bummer to see it end so quickly.
Honestly, I think I ran out of ideas for it.

Originally, the story was going to be a lot shorter, something along the lines of how "October Rising" was.

Did anyone catch my little tip of the hat to that story in this one ?

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Re: Looking Forward, Looking Back.

Post by Bearcat » Wed Apr 27, 2011 7:14 pm

12_Gauge_Chimp wrote:
Bearcat wrote:Damn. Moar is over. Seems like it ended abruptly. Did you run out of ideas or don't have enough time to dedicate to the story? I'm not jumping on you or anything, it's just a bummer to see it end so quickly.
Honestly, I think I ran out of ideas for it.

Originally, the story was going to be a lot shorter, something along the lines of how "October Rising" was.

Did anyone catch my little tip of the hat to that story in this one ?
Gotcha. I didn't because I haven't read that.
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Re: Looking Forward, Looking Back.

Post by 12_Gauge_Chimp » Wed Apr 27, 2011 7:17 pm

Bearcat wrote:
12_Gauge_Chimp wrote:
Bearcat wrote:Damn. Moar is over. Seems like it ended abruptly. Did you run out of ideas or don't have enough time to dedicate to the story? I'm not jumping on you or anything, it's just a bummer to see it end so quickly.
Honestly, I think I ran out of ideas for it.

Originally, the story was going to be a lot shorter, something along the lines of how "October Rising" was.

Did anyone catch my little tip of the hat to that story in this one ?
Gotcha. I didn't because I haven't read that.
Click the link in my sig line. That's my first foray into writing zombie stories.

Hopefully, I'll be able to turn that one into a film sometime in the future.

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Re: Looking Forward, Looking Back.

Post by Bearcat » Wed Apr 27, 2011 8:31 pm

12_Gauge_Chimp wrote:
Bearcat wrote:
12_Gauge_Chimp wrote:
Bearcat wrote:Damn. Moar is over. Seems like it ended abruptly. Did you run out of ideas or don't have enough time to dedicate to the story? I'm not jumping on you or anything, it's just a bummer to see it end so quickly.
Honestly, I think I ran out of ideas for it.

Originally, the story was going to be a lot shorter, something along the lines of how "October Rising" was.

Did anyone catch my little tip of the hat to that story in this one ?
Gotcha. I didn't because I haven't read that.
Click the link in my sig line. That's my first foray into writing zombie stories.

Hopefully, I'll be able to turn that one into a film sometime in the future.
Hey, I'm not an actor, but I always wanted to play a bad guy.
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Re: Looking Forward, Looking Back.

Post by 12_Gauge_Chimp » Wed Apr 27, 2011 9:20 pm

Bearcat wrote:
12_Gauge_Chimp wrote:
Bearcat wrote: Gotcha. I didn't because I haven't read that.
Click the link in my sig line. That's my first foray into writing zombie stories.

Hopefully, I'll be able to turn that one into a film sometime in the future.
Hey, I'm not an actor, but I always wanted to play a bad guy.
I'll keep that in mind should I ever make a movie.

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Re: Looking Forward, Looking Back.

Post by Curtai » Sat Apr 30, 2011 1:06 am

Awesome story, kinda wish there was MOAR but its all good, you could so take this further, either like 28days to 28 weeks or something different... it's all good thanks for the read and I can't wait to read more from you.
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Re: Looking Forward, Looking Back.

Post by JCgoose » Tue Jul 12, 2011 11:18 pm

Just caught up on it all mate :)

I liked it I think you did well with it. Ending was good I'd like it and it stopped the plot getting to drawn out and tangled.

When are we going to see your next piece?


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Re: Looking Forward, Looking Back.

Post by 12_Gauge_Chimp » Thu Jul 14, 2011 1:52 pm

JCgoose wrote:Just caught up on it all mate :)

I liked it I think you did well with it. Ending was good I'd like it and it stopped the plot getting to drawn out and tangled.

When are we going to see your next piece?


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Re: Looking Forward, Looking Back.

Post by Nancy1340 » Sat Aug 27, 2011 1:25 am

Well I don't understand why Frankie kept Dallas and then shot her and said it was because they took stuff from his shop when he had already told them they could help themselves to what ever they needed. :?:

Anyway thanks for the story.

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Re: Looking Forward, Looking Back.

Post by debralee » Sat Aug 27, 2011 2:04 am

Really enjoyed your story. Glad you let him return to Dallas before you ended it. Was icing on the cake .
Thank you for sharing it with us.

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Re: Looking Forward, Looking Back.

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Re: Looking Forward, Looking Back.

Post by deathstalkertwo » Fri Apr 27, 2012 11:43 pm

Outstanding story, THANK you for writting and sharing this one.

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Re: Looking Forward, Looking Back.

Post by 12_Gauge_Chimp » Tue Oct 02, 2012 6:59 pm

Ok, I know it's been awhile since anyone has checked this story out, but a recent conversation in Chat Thread had me remembering the original ending to "Looking Forward, Looking Back."

In the original draft of the story, when Frankie shoots Dallas in the store, her wounds would later turn out to be fatal. This would send Chimpov over the edge and he'd lose his remaining sanity. He'd kill Frankie like in the version I posted long ago and eventually he'd return to the farm and just shut down. Eventually, it would become too much for him and he'd just snap.

At this point, Flynn would take over the narration duties and this is what the final part of the story would be.

Here's the original ending epilogue to "Looking Forward, Looking Back."

"Flynn: After Dallas', well Alison's death, Chimpov just retreated from this world. He never spoke again and just sat in the old chair Dallas used to and stare out the window. He lost weight to the point where he just didn't look like the bear of a man that rescued Mike, Kat and I from the airport bus. He was wasting away. For awhile, he was on the brink of death, but suddenly that all changed one day. He still didn't speak, but he did begin eating again which was good. He gained back his appearance and started looking like his old self again. We all thought he was making a comeback, until the night he died. He had gone to Alison's grave and spent a few hours there, just sitting there, looking off into the night. As I walked over to him, he just got up and walked off into the night. I called out to him and asked him where he was going, but got no answer. I ran back to the house to grab my SKS and a flashlight when I heard a single shot ring out in the night. I fell to my knees and began crying as I knew Chimpov had joined Dallas in death. The man I knew as Viktor 'Chimpov' Romanov had taken his life somewhere out in the darkness. We never found his body, but we still made a grave for him next to his beloved Dallas. He had loved her in this life and now he would spend the rest of eternity next to her. Rest in peace, mate. You've earned it."

By the way, thank you all for reading my story and for the comments. It really means a lot to me and I'm glad you all liked it. :D

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Re: Looking Forward, Looking Back.

Post by 12_Gauge_Chimp » Mon Feb 18, 2013 5:33 pm

Seeing as how no one has said anything about the original ending to this story, I've decided to go back through this story and edit some stuff. I'll be adding some new dialogue and editing out some parts that I feel just didn't add to the story. Stay tuned for that.

Hopefully, this version of "Looking Forward, Looking Back" will be just as entertaining as the previous one.

Thanks again for reading this story as well as my other ones. :D

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Re: Looking Forward, Looking Back.

Post by Laager » Tue Feb 19, 2013 3:22 pm

I actually liked the current ending to the story.........
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Re: Looking Forward, Looking Back.

Post by 12_Gauge_Chimp » Tue Feb 19, 2013 3:53 pm

Laager wrote:I actually liked the current ending to the story.........
I liked it as well, which is why I switched it from the darker ending.

I just figured y'all would like to see what the original ending was. I may just go ahead and delete the post with the original ending so no one is confused as to which ending is the actual one.

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Re: Looking Forward, Looking Back.

Post by Laager » Tue Feb 19, 2013 4:34 pm

12_Gauge_Chimp wrote:
Laager wrote:I actually liked the current ending to the story.........
I liked it as well, which is why I switched it from the darker ending.

I just figured y'all would like to see what the original ending was. I may just go ahead and delete the post with the original ending so no one is confused as to which ending is the actual one.

Hmmmm, While I did enjoy seeing how it was originally going to end, I figure a zombie apocalypse or any type of apocalypse is dark enough, coupled with the behavior of a certain type of person as well.......just like a bit of a happy ending is all I will say. Given a choice between the current ending and the darker ending I would prefer the more romantic less dark version, but there may be other readers that like the darker ending.
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Re: Looking Forward, Looking Back.

Post by 12_Gauge_Chimp » Tue Feb 19, 2013 4:39 pm

Laager wrote:
12_Gauge_Chimp wrote:
Laager wrote:I actually liked the current ending to the story.........
I liked it as well, which is why I switched it from the darker ending.

I just figured y'all would like to see what the original ending was. I may just go ahead and delete the post with the original ending so no one is confused as to which ending is the actual one.

Hmmmm, While I did enjoy seeing how it was originally going to end, I figure a zombie apocalypse or any type of apocalypse is dark enough, coupled with the behavior of a certain type of person as well.......just like a bit of a happy ending is all I will say. Given a choice between the current ending and the darker ending I would prefer the more romantic less dark version, but there may be other readers that like the darker ending.
True.

Although, since I wrote a sequel to this one, the original ending is kind of a moot point now since we know Chimpov and Dallas survive and go on to other things.

The original ending and the subsequent posting are not considered part of the continuity of my "Looking" series. It was just a fun little peek into my mind and the writing process behind one of my best stories on ZS. :D

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Re: Looking Forward, Looking Back.

Post by Laager » Tue Feb 19, 2013 7:47 pm

I have to admit that I really, really like all of your stories and would like to see more....... :wink:
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Re: Looking Forward, Looking Back.

Post by 12_Gauge_Chimp » Tue Feb 19, 2013 8:36 pm

Laager wrote:I have to admit that I really, really like all of your stories and would like to see more....... :wink:
I've got another story in the planning stages right now, but it may be awhile until I post any of it.

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Re: Looking Forward, Looking Back.

Post by Laager » Wed Feb 20, 2013 9:39 pm

12_Gauge_Chimp wrote:
Laager wrote:I have to admit that I really, really like all of your stories and would like to see more....... :wink:
I've got another story in the planning stages right now, but it may be awhile until I post any of it.


Well since no one else has stepped forward, I'd be more than willing to attempt to proof read your new story.....or let you bounce ideas off my thick skull. :D
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Re: Looking Forward, Looking Back.

Post by 12_Gauge_Chimp » Wed Feb 20, 2013 11:20 pm

Laager wrote:
12_Gauge_Chimp wrote:
Laager wrote:I have to admit that I really, really like all of your stories and would like to see more....... :wink:
I've got another story in the planning stages right now, but it may be awhile until I post any of it.


Well since no one else has stepped forward, I'd be more than willing to attempt to proof read your new story.....or let you bounce ideas off my thick skull. :D
You've got a deal, Laager.

Give me a couple months and I'll PM you the rough drafts.

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Re: Looking Forward, Looking Back.

Post by Laager » Thu Feb 21, 2013 9:41 pm

12_Gauge_Chimp wrote:
Laager wrote:
12_Gauge_Chimp wrote:
Laager wrote:I have to admit that I really, really like all of your stories and would like to see more....... :wink:
I've got another story in the planning stages right now, but it may be awhile until I post any of it.


Well since no one else has stepped forward, I'd be more than willing to attempt to proof read your new story.....or let you bounce ideas off my thick skull. :D
You've got a deal, Laager.

Give me a couple months and I'll PM you the rough drafts.


Excellent!!! I will be waiting........
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